These four come courtesy of the commenter anubelore. He posted four comments in a row on “My Sister Set Me Up on a Blind Date”. His first comment is:
Not even halfway through page two and
your characters are prattling on about “patriarchal” small towns and related bullshit, delusional social theories only taken seriously by brainless “Gender Studies” majors and other lackwitted imbeciles who wouldn’t recognize *true* “social justice” if it danced naked in front of them and gave them a (well-deserved) slap in the face. I took the mentions of the ridiculous concept that is “positive consent” (aka “affirmative consent”) with a massive grain of salt, because I was interested in the story, but…Stars and Stones this guy is an absolute imbecile! She’s not having trouble getting a date with a decent guy because of “the patriarchy” or sexism, she’s having trouble getting a date with a decent guy because her definition of “decent” is Will Smith, basically! …On second thought, no, I’m sure it’s actually the patriarchy, not the fact that there’s a limited supply of potential “Will Smith”-s in a (as described) *small* town. Yep, I’m sure that’s it. Darn that evil sexism! /sarcasm …Jesus!
Do not pass “Go,” do not collect $200, etc. I’ll finish the story, but at this point, if this stupidity consumes much more of the plot and dialogue, I cannot imagine this work deserving more than one or two stars, in my estimation.
-Anubelore : – |
He’s not even halfway through page two of a seven page story and he’s so upset that he feels compelled to stop and write a comment about how much bullshit my story has.
Fortunately, the feeling doesn’t last long:
And I get to the bottom of the page and feel like an idiot.
Of course. Isn’t that always the way? Darn it.
The “dates are shows, manliness, blah, bla, blah…” nonsense is still nonsense, but at least he’s acknowledging that affirmative consent is insanity. Sure, he says it’s a good idea, but that “mere mortals” need to be able to comply with the policy. That’s not affirmative consent. It’s “consent”. Anyway, feeling much more hopeful about the story now!
And just to show that he’s not a bad guy:
by the way, your grammar and sentence structure are excellent! Pardon the non-sequitur.
So to recap before he gets to the middle of page two, the story has him so upset that he has to post a comment and then:
And I get to the *top* of the *third* page, and feel like an idiot.” *groan*